Interesting topic to choose, but a great allegory to illistrate the bond between a mother and daughter. Very smooth ending, it brought out a smile, a little humorous.
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I liked the point where she plays with her sister, very heartwarming I suppose you could say.
I liked this. It feels to me almost as if they are entering heaven, though you may not have meant it that way. The part where Samantha is pulled into the storm is the personification of Hell, becuase of her apparent lying. Anyways, that's my take on it. Great story, I liked the way you structured the sentences and the descriptions that were used.
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