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Review by Jason Maffettone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ ★★★★★ | (4.0)
I quite like this, especially the use of historical settings and characters and the intigration of verious myths into the plot line. Your dialogs and banter are interesting and keep pulling the eye further along very well.

My only real complaint is that some of your language is a little "choppy" or unclear in a few places.

Example, early on: "The southern region received even less. Inhabitants of the area saw rain as a blessing seldom bestowed upon them, but were always grateful nonetheless."

seems to contradict itself, and you tend to overuse "and" in sentences alot which is a little distracting. I tend to do that myself, sometimes I find it helpful to read passages aloud to myself to get a feel for their flow.
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