I really like your style of writing. This poem reminds me of when my little cousin was born, so it did make me smile! I definitely wouldn't change the 'L's to 'W's though. It would strip the piece of it's simplicity and naivety and replace it with a crass interpretation of infancy that just wouldn't be necessary. Thanks for writing this, it inspires confidence to know that people have a passion in something!!
Hey, wow, that was so much fun to read! It's just what a poem should be - imaginative and entertaining. I was even tapping my toes as I was reading it!
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