I like this. Short, sweet, and to the point. The ending line is a neat and strong ending. The only thing you could maybe try differently is deciding to use all punctuation or no punctuation. It's such a nice little poem that you really don't need commas or periods at all, it would also help convey the sense of it being a tweet.
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