This is really good! It kept my interest and kept me waiting for more. I don't really know what to say about how to continue, it seems like it is at an ending point. One way you could go is writing about how this all affected his life, his relationships, and the struggles he had to go through to overcome the secret of his father and his sisters death and the guilt he feels about her death.
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