Beautiful piece of writing.Has the feeling of first snows falling. So soft and gentle.Like the thought of 'resting roses'. Good use of repitition,(echo)'Floating ghostly between sentries silent in frozen linen'. Wonderful use of imagery.'Smell the stars'. Fantastic.Only one small quibble,maybe some of the one word lines could be joined to longer lines to improve the flow of the write.
Pretty good for your first poem. Impressive work.Thought provoking write. At first I was wondering where this horrible world is. Thought it may have been on another planet or on this planet after a nuclear accident. Was glad when it was just a dream. Hope you never return
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