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I am often very critical in the mechanics of writing as too many errors can impact really badly on the reader and their desire to keep reading. I also concentrate on the storyline pace and character development. Any reviews provided by me are honest and encouraging but are not designed to be wishy washy with kindness - my aim is to help not destroy!!!
I'm good at...
Sport .... oh better add reading and writing
Favorite Genres
historical romances, romances in general, action and drama
Least Favorite Genres
poetry but that doesn't mean I won't accept it - I will still read and review
Favorite Item Types
Chapters, Short Stories, Drafts, Novels and Fiction
Least Favorite Item Types
School items like Essays, Assignments etc
I will not review...
..... no it is I will review EVERYTHING. Even if I do not understand it, I will still offer the best advice and service I can.
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Review by Becky Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi JPMurphy,

Please remember, I'm a writer just like you, and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful, encouraging and supportive. I hope that my comments help you in some way but remember that they are just my oppinions and you can take them at face value.

I have really enjoyed the emotion your stanzas have created however the flow of some words seemed alittle forced with trying to end on a ryhme. I will happily admit that poetry is not my strong point and don't know the structures at all so if you have kept to a formal format in each of the lines, you may disagree with me about that. As an example your opening two lines 'A dimming moon glow As night fades away' is alittle complex in trying to establish your setting.

I do really like your 'Forever is a day Longing for tomorrow' - it is a really good statement in matching the regretfulness of seperation and well done.

Thanks for sharing your work.

Becky
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