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Review of The Black Rune  
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Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (3.0)
Yor story line is very good, lots of potential, however there are two areas that could use some work. Your details and the action. For example, when we met Bane describe why he is mighty. Later when Bane ate kitana, tell how he ate her. i.e: "Bane roars in trimuph, striking foward he snatched Kitana up in his deadly jaws...." But a little detail here and there, with more discription would make this good story great.
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