Overall the story is good. The characters are interesting. However, the writing is a little bit bland. Maybe try a little more description? Put us in the moment. But it's good, keep up the great work :)
Printed from https://webx1.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/allison11691
Generated in 0.07 seconds at 6:15pm on Mar 15, 2026 via server WEBX1.