It took me awhile to read this. I started the first paragraph, stopped, had to re-read it, and so on for the entire thing. I thought the story was a good summary of a book, or movie, but as an overall story by itself I found it to be a little lacking in detail. I did see you that you stated you were adding more information in with the brothers and I think that will definitely give it some more depth. Perhaps a little more background information, a little more detail to the characters, would definitely add a lot to the story. Overall I like the concept. Great job!
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