Interesting structure, especially the lack of punctuation and capital letters (which add to a weirdly unsettling atmosphere). I liked where this was going. My main criticism would be that it was rather short, I was left wanting to know more about this character. More description of whoever is being described would definitely make this a stronger piece.
But, overall, I thought this was very well written.
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