Its good, you should continue writing this as a novel. And I suggest you should include the incantation sentences, it would be more terrific if you would.
I like the repetition of "you taught" on the first paragraph, and the capitalized words was effective on me because i tend to read it with emphasis. I like reading poems with rhymes and i think you did great with it....
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