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Alright so I cleared out my port. I feel the best way to start over here is to start fresh with some new ideas. It's what I need. I feel I was more productive as a writer when I was a frequent visitor here. My first goal is to earn enough points to get a membership that will allow me to have more in my portfolio or maybe I'll keep this way, and it will force me to create better quality reading material. Either way it should be interesting
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| Alright it's been a while since I've stepped foot... I suppose that's not right. It's been a while since I wrote anything to everyone. I joined a Writing group on FB...to be honest I'm going to quit it. I asked for help on a hot button issue, and I posted a little snippet. It was the worst decision ever. I specifically asked if the scene worked, or if I should try something else. I got page long angry responses from what I thought were reasonable people. Half of them couldn't address me by name. They just called me "The author", nobody answered the question either. If one person had said, hey man you might want to try something else, It would've been fine. So that's my story |
I have a question. In my story. Each person in Mr. Reverie's employ is given a choice. Return to who you were, or take a sizeable payout and restart your life with no knowledge of the previous. The main character fears who she was, and most likely will take the second option. Now I can take the story in any number of ways but these three stand out the most.
1. I start the next chapter of the main character in her new life, and Mr. Reverie comes knocking asking for help. We find out who she was throughout the story, and how she came to him first.
2. The story progresses with the main character doing jobs while she agonizes over what she read, trying to decide what choice suits her best.
3. The main character comes to enjoy the work, and chooses to keep on working for him. She now must hide her activities from her friends and loved ones. |
So I scrapped the mystery Idea. it wasn't working. I did get a rather interesting idea. I decided that should you lose all your memories or try to cancel a deal with Mr. Reverie you end up working for him collecting memories. He calls these peoples reminders, some of them go rogue addicted to altering themselves with memories, (Think acquiring skills they aren't supposed to have) Each job gets a little piece of the Reminder back, but the question is, do you want to know who you were?
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| So I decided Mr. Reverie's opponent shall be an untested detective from a wealthy family, named Vincent Wolfson. (They run a chainsaw and forestry equipment company) He's broken away from his party-hardy friends, and his family's influence, to pursue his dream of being a private investigator. Although his father gave him the first case, it won't be like any other in existence |
need more research for the quadriplegic story. In the meantime I found a cool prompt about a man who introduced himself as the lesser of two evils, business card and all.
What I have so far is. He feeds on memories rather than souls. Important memories. Each additional task costs another memory not just any memory either. Ones pivotal to your life. Ive decided on Mr. Echo or Mr. Reverie as a name for the lesser of two evils. When selling your soul isn't a option, call the lesser of two evils. |
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I finally finished the first chapter. I changed Jasper's ability again, something less complicated and easier to understand. In the next chapter comes the fall out of what happened on the platform of discernment |
So I decided to modify Jasper Rathbones powers. I am stepping away from the magic shape thing, to be honest I think I've overused it. So how do I make him cool, without treading over familiar territory. I went to get bread earlier and it struck me. A magical warrior uses both magic and might to win the day. So to balance out the magic with physical capability. I kept it simple he'll have shield magic. So maybe that was too simple right? It needed just a little more. I decided his shields allow him to create impossibly sharp edges on weapons, and as time goes on he'll be able to imbue those shields with elemental abilities, but it takes serious energy to do, and his magic will be powered by his body.
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A story I wrote with no magic involved. No matter how this does in the competition I am glad I wrote it. It felt good to step out of my comfort zone
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| SO I completed my short story for the contest. I've called it Back Issues, and the one-sentence synopsis is. How far would you go for your collected memories |
| I've chosen my plot and characters. I decided to go with a grieving teen and a female Liquidator who recently became a surrogate mother. The teen wants the complete collection of comics he and his mother collected when she died of cancer. They used to own a comic shock but in the face of medical bills, they had to sell it. The liquidator was in charge of settling their debts. Halfway through I'll reveal the teen killed his mother because he couldn't bear to see her in pain anymore. This will trigger the liquidator's guilt over her sister who died of an overdose of fentanyl, and she ignored the signs of addiction. Regardless of what anyone thinks, I have a good feeling about this idea |
I have the first challenge from the NYC MIDNIGHT contest I have to write a thriller about a liquidator and ransom has to be a part of the story
I've never written a thriller and I still have 7 days to come up with a killer plot but first I'll bone up on how to write a good thriller |
| I entered a short story challenge I'm going in blind as the prompt drops tonight at midnight. If win three more challenges await with five grand as the prize. I'll let you guys know how it turns out |
I think epigone is a bit of silly name for what jasper will be. The fighting style copying thing doesn't really work now that I've sat on the idea for a bit.
I've boiled it down to using his soul like a weapon, which will have it's good and bad points. I've tried this idea several times and can't find the right character to affix it too, also what to call it.
I have selected these names.
Cadell This Welsh name refers to “the battle spirit.”
2. Huchon This Scottish name comes from the French word Hugon and means ‘spirit, mind, or heart.’
3.Cheveyo This Native American Hopi name means ‘spirit warrior.’
I like these three the best but any of you has a better one I'd like to hear it
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for her review of Back Issues. I hope it encourages others to read it too
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Well done and good luck! 
