No yo man, No more yo

My first attempt at a poem - an entry to Writers Cramp Contest - no "u"

No Yo man, No more yo

Watch 'em live, desperate for more
Running in the fast lane.
Chasing power, the future ignored,
Careening down the fast lane.
Corner congregations, driving their deals,
Livin' in the fast lane?

"Mosey on down, hep, get on and see"
Life in the fast lane.
"Move on it man, don’t quit out now"
Life in the fast lane.
"Grab the dope man, reel 'em all in"
Life in the fast lane.
"Shoot the speed kid, pin it on"
Life in the fast lane.
"Stand down now, kid, stand down"
Life in the fast lane.
"Fly high bro, wings aloft
Life in the fast lane?
Speak it now, child, make it plain
Life in a fast lane?
Raise yo ass, man, shake it down, eh?
Bro? Life, man? It’s life.
Ain’t it?"

Death in the fast lane
Life passes them by, driving no more,
Wings cut short, smart talk now silenced.
Was it life, this life in the fast lane?