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 | The Lighthouse Keeper  [13+] Audrina finds herself attracted to the unusual lighthouse keeper.  |
| (4.5)  A review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  First Impressions: The opening was very vivid, making it easy for the readers to imagine the scene. There were lots of small details that had an almost cinematic effect - the stuck door, the main character pushing it open with her shoulder - and the readers could follow along every step of the way, hear the wind whistle, see the lighthouse. There was an instant emotional connection between the two characters, and although Audrina kept feeling there was something ‘wrong’ with Damian, her attraction to him was stronger than her unease or fear. Damian’s strange illness, his connection to Esther, and his supernatural nature were compelling, although you didn’t fully explain it. It worked for me for most of the story because I enjoyed trying to gather clues as to what he might be. I thought he might be a vampire at first - he looked at her neck when he asked her to lie down beside him, and I was sure she had made a horrible mistake - but that wasn’t right. My guess would be that he is a cursed immortal who is bound to the lighthouse, sustained by it and doomed to guard it as both beacon and warning. Perhaps he once failed to keep the light burning, causing deaths at sea, and his punishment is to maintain it forever, never leaving, never dying. That would tie in perfectly with the prompt and also with the line about neglecting his own light.  Suggestions: The story was well written and I only noticed a couple of small suggestions: “No, but I am alive – just like you.” I think this would work better as “No, I am alive” since he is denying that he is a ghost. The lens were rotating correctly “The lens was” or “The lenses were”? “I am a beast who was neglected his own light.” “who has neglected”?  Final Thoughts: The ending felt like there might be more to the story. The tale could stand on its own, but I had questions that weren’t answered, mainly about Damian and his backstory but also about Esther’s role, and, of course, how the romance between the two main characters was going to continue. If this were a first chapter, I would definitely want to read on to find out what his secret was and how she was going to react to it. Having said that, the line about him neglecting his own light made me think of ‘Beauty and the Beast’, and I would expect Audrina to also be able to look past whatever made him a beast.
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