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 | Touch the Sky  [E] A short fantasy story about a little girl to help build self-esteem.  |
| (4.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORYKitty is a young girl who wants to touch the sky, but can't and gets frustrated. An Elf comes to help her out.  WHAT I LIKEDI thought the story had a nice appeal and message for young children.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUEThe dialogue accents the narration. Good use of dialogue tags. OPENING The opening uses a whimsical voice to lure young readers and keep them engaged. CHARACTERSKitty is a sweet child still learning about the world, and the Elf is pure inspiration. FLOW & PACINGThe opening set up the dilemma, the middle built and heightened what Kitty was discouraged with and end proved very inspirational. MECHANICSI might suggest a small edit for punctuation tags. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title fits the story. The descriptions would appeal to younger readers. If anything, I thought the phrase "Open up your mind and believe that anything is possible and you can touch the sky any time you want to" was a bit repetitive and might suggest finding a different way to phrase it. Overall, a heartwarming story that offers hope and inspiration. An Angel Army Review
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