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 Stream of consciousness Open in new Window. [E]
A diary entry in which I explore my way into a stream of consciousness style.
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Ooh, a journal ramble! I love writing like this, all self observant and considering the building blocks of what makes good writing. I find myself constantly analyzing my handwriting, noticing when it becomes smaller, larger, more cramped, messier, tighter, etc. One might say I obsess over having just the right smoothness of pen and quality of ink to help the words flow better.

As for stream of consciousness, at first I assumed you meant you were freewrite journaling for your own personal explorations, as they tell one to do sometimes to let the thoughts spill out as they may. I see here you are rather trying to figure out the craft of writing fiction in a stream of consciousness style. I might suggest I think you have it wrong. In my Elements of Literature textbooks, we were presented with the short story The Jilting of Granny Weatherall as the prime example of stream of consciousness fiction. The author literally went inside the old lady's mind and traced every fleeting thought as it appeared, without regards to forming a coherent story, leaving us to piece together her life as she lies in bed thinking about the years that have flown by. It is first person narration taken to the extreme, where we don't even see any kind of setting (from what I can recall,) only a wild streaming flow of seemingly random disconnected thoughts deep within the narrator's mind. Kind of hard to explain without actually seeing it for oneself.

I can't say as that I've ever read Virginia Woolf, but I have read Jane Eyre, but the last time was at least... Goodness, maybe twelve, fifteen years ago? Huh... I should read it again. Maybe on Google Books or Hoopla. Your final set of test sentences about the blue eyes reminds me of the advanced internal monologue technique I've tried to master over the years: Free Indirect Discourse. My mentor Max Griffin 🏳️‍🌈 Author Icon explained to me that, within the framework of a third person limited narrative, instead of setting off the protagonist's thoughts in italics, I should strive to weave them into the narration and allow the protagonist's voice to be a part of the story, so to speak.

I treat writing fiction quite instinctively, and it's hard for me to explain things properly when I'm not always sure I can put into words what I'm doing. I write, and I do my best to make it logical, mature, sensory, emotive, and engaging, and somehow it works pretty well. Best wishes for your writing satisfaction as you press onward! I look forward to seeing more of your work around here.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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