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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Hetty goes witching on Halloween but forgets one of the most important things. You can't go witching without it!

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I loved the character names from Hetty the witch, Sootytail, Booce, and Grizella! Very creative and they made me chuckle.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omnisicent. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star*DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets up the drama - it's time to go witching, but when Booce poops out, Hetty and Sootytail have a big problem on their hands. I loved the opening and wanted to keep reading.


*Star*CHARACTERS

The characters are riot and perfect for the story.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the problem, the middle set on finding a solution and end solved the drama.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title let the reader what to expect from the story. Great comedic elements. A lighthearted chuckle that's perfect for witching.

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