Hi Leedeel

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Positives

I liked the juxtaposition of the animal and human roles in this story. I thought it was a really clever way to subvert expectations, and you did a good job of still capturing the owner-pet relationship while inverting the roles. Nice work!


Suggestions

I would have loved to have seen a little more build-up to the payoff of the switched roles. As it is, the story just kind of lays it out like it's a commonly-understood fact, and I think there's a real opportunity here to subvert your audience's expectations with a little bit of setup and payoff. I think it would be really compelling if we're following a story of a teenage girl who is being distracted from doing her homework by her pet... and if we get a more traditional image of that in our minds first before you pull a bait-and-switch and reveal that the dog is the one doing homework once it has a chance to catch the reader off guard and surprise them.


Overall

Overall, this was a fun read and it has a lot of potential. You're off to a great start!


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Jeff
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