Hi Chairsuck246

Congratulations on your account anniversary! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion.


Positives

I thought the writing was direct and to the point, and had some really visceral, impactful language for such a short piece.


Suggestions

It's a little unclear what the purpose or goal of this piece is. It's listed as being a draft of a piece of writing in the "Animal" genre, but the intro and the body of the item itself don't really elaborate on that premise.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job making an impactful impression with your writing, but there's a bit of confusion about what this piece is or what the author's intentions with it are, which would be helpful to elaborate upon.


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