Hi Hiltonian!

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Positives

I thought you did a good job presenting this piece. You share multiple examples of the kind of behavior that you're worried about, and then present a persuasive rhetorical strategy at the end to really get the reader thinking about the implications of what's happening. Nice work!


Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a solid job with this piece. Well done!


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