Hi Aster

Congratulations on your account anniversary! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion.


Positives

I like the description in this piece. You did a great job of creating a vivid atmosphere early in this piece.


Suggestions

As a story, it's lacking a little narrative. The protagonist wanders into an old house and finds a pearl necklace... and that's about it. Even though it's only a 300-word story, I was hoping for a bit more in the way of backstory, or conclusion to make it feel like a story as opposed to a vignette.


Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable read. Nice work!


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