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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Business bonuses secretly dispensed can cause trouble in the future. I wonder if eventually their overtime work is discovered and what the boss does? Jenna seemed hesitant but it didn't take much for her to take advantage of this unique business deal.

Your story and characters are believable. What you left out of your story might be more enticing to readers than what is easily seen by readers. I kinda saw the ending early in the story. They were alone. He planned the get-together but told her he over-ordered. She believed his motives, but I suspected she had an interest in him, so went along with the story he created.

Her reactions or more importantly those she didn't exhibit told me she already wanted a close relationship with her mentor.

THANK YOU FOR WRITING AND FOR SHARING YOUR STORY WITH ME AND WDC MEMBERS. Oops capslock, by accident.

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