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 Min Open in new Window. [E]
A peasant girl aims to improve her life.
by Sumojo Author Icon
Review of Min  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! I'm happy to be reviewing this for "Annette's Anniversary Raffle" Open in new Window.. Remember that this review is all a part of the challenge and it is only my opinion. Please use what you find useful and ignore what you don't. This review is given in love and with respect to you and your writing.

*CheckB* Overall impression and emotional impact: The first paragraph hooks the reader with the speaker hiding in a plum tree. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.


*CheckY* Grammar, spelling, and mechanics: I discovered no technical problems.


*CheckR* Suggestions for improvement: I suggest continuing Min's story, because it is a story that should be told.


*CheckG* My favorite parts: I like Min because she is an intriguing and sympathetic character, with the potential of being a strong woman. I also like the way this story ended because it revealed Min's creativity .


Thank you so much for sharing your writing! It was a pleasure to review you. I genuinely hope you found my comments useful, but feel free to ignore those you didn't.

Good luck with the rest of "Annette's Anniversary Raffle" Open in new Window.! It's not easy, but you can do it! You're already 1 entry closer to the end! *Party* Keep on writing! *NotepadY* *PenB*


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