Hi Life Must Go Forward,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is tinged with anxiety and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Marony is trying to harm the speaker. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, a young woman remembers the first time she met a troubled boy when she is unsure of his intentions. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)He was always trying to startle me this way and-There should be a comma after "way".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.