Hi Demerious,
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the speaker will do about his girlfriend's infidelity. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. The story is about a man who finds out his girlfriend is having an affair but decides not to deal with the problem head on. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. The piece is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.