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The Night Open in new Window. [13+]
A frightful journey of one mans night.
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Review of The Night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, JesterDev!
This is pretty good. I like dark stories (I write horror), and you did a nice job with descriptions of the ‘un-rested’ rising from their tombs’. I also like the haunting flavor of it, but what stood out to me was how you changed from 3rd person voice to 1st person voice as you discover that YOU are now one of the ones who have been (or are soon to be) dancing with the dead!
Very well done, my friend! That surprise ending was perfect, and having this unnamed female and her hounds leading them all was a nice touch!
The spelling and grammar was great, but I did spot one tiny niggle:
‘...and every night no soul knows(,) nor dare they ask’
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! ‘Twas a pleasure to read, and I hope to see you back here soon!

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