Hi Mastiff, I followed you at I Write and I'm reviewing your Vignette. This was a troubling piece, I could feel the tension as I read it.

I don't look for technical error unless it jumps out at me, I saw no problems with punctuation, spelling, syntax, etc.

The piece moves smoothly and word choices create an ominous situation. I do wonder about his injuries, are they of the mind, body or spirit or all of the above? I wasn't sure from what I read.

This is a depressing slice of life that ends almost hopelessly.

I thought it well crafted.

~~Tink

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .