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Review #4506837
Viewing a review of:
Wheel of Fortune Open in new Window. [18+]
My blog--I pull a card--if it doesn't speak to me...perhaps it is for you?
by ridinghhood-p.boutilier Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "September 23, 2019" Open in new Window.
Review of Wheel of Fortune  Open in new Window.
Review by ruwth Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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May God bless both of us as we grow as writers together!


"I Write in 2019" Open in new Window. has me reviewing your item as one of my extra reviews today! *Wink*

Title:

The title of the entry is the date rather then the actual title of your poem. This is the pattern you have used for the whole book so I am guessing it works for you. I prefer using the real title simply as a mechanism to whet the appetite of my readers.

I suggest putting your title in a bolded font. At first, I thought your syllable count was off because I considered "Choose" to be the first line of your poem. Of course, you have to bold the prompt so maybe bolding the title would be confusing...

Contest Information:

I know from your post on "I Write in 2019" Open in new Window. that your poem is an entry written for "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.. Because dilatory is bolded, I assume it was the prompt that day.

I would like that information available in your entry. You can add it in a dropnote to keep your entry clean in appearance.

The Main Course:

I like your poem but I am not sure you used the word dilatory correctly.

Summary:

I took a moment to look at the body of your item and some other entries. I am not sure I understand the phrase about the Tarot cards. For me, it detracts a bit from your poem. Perhaps a dropnote would work for this as well and let your poem take center stage more solidly.

Anyways, I choose life! *Wink*



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