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| (4.0)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Hello there, Rduane! This isn't too bad for a short FF piece. Flatulence might be a taboo subject, but alas, it's part of life and we have to deal with it. I like how described Ornell (someone with a low tooth count but even lower IQ  , and the spelling and grammar was flawless (thank you!). But the ending was pretty melodramatic. You still had a few words to use, so it would have been nice to know what his little 'trick' was to remedy his gaseous malady.To be honest, I honestly think you could expand on this! It might not be for everybody, but I'm sure there's a few people out there like me that would read it. Just think of the all the strange situations you could put him in when his problem arises! One thing you forgot about this was to use the prompt phrase: “give me one good reason”. Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-Since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.
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