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Ice Open in new Window. [E]
A 299 word story written for the Daily Flash Fiction Challenge 8/14/19.
by hullabaloo22 Author Icon
Review of Ice  Open in new Window.
Review by Angus Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi there, Hullabaloo22!
This is good, and a little strange and scary too.
I like how you described where Brynn and Irene are at the beginning; that sets the scene perfectly for what's to come next. I also like the dialogue. The reader can easily see Irene's concern about what might be under the ice, but I'm not too sure about the ending. I realize that glove might just be somebody's that they lost, but it could also have come off of somebody who fell into the river. After all, you did infer that there was 'no hand inside'.
So I'm not too sure if Brynn's reaction was correct. Or maybe I'm letting my own imagination run away with me!
But I'm sure you see my point, right?
Anyway, well done! Nice job using the prompt words, the spelling and grammar were flawless (thank you!), and the whole piece read smoothly!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Good luck in the contest, and have a great day!

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