Reviewing this as a fellow participant in "I Write in 2019"  [E]

First impression: I liked the format of this poem - free verse, yet structured into stanzas of four lines each; the form itself reflects the content.

Suggestions: I don't really have any; the poem features concrete imagery, with a few abstractions that fit within such as "obscure unease." But these serve to highlight the imagery, not replace it.

Overall: Having looked at the contest this was written for, I can see where this comes from. But I'm not sure that's necessary; the poem stands on its own. Relating the structure of the asylum to its former residents is an apt metaphor. Good one - keep it up!

You responded to this review 08/11/2019 @ 1:09am EDT

Upgraded Membership required to use macros.Create custom macros to insert text in this editor. [Beta] X   GIPHY Search   Send a reply... Include Gift Points