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         *Pumpkin2* Greetings, Abby Gayle Author Icon! I found your item, "Invalid Item" Open in new Window., in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

My First Impression?
         I love being challenged with all dialogue prompts! It's also fun to read them. *Wink* You've done an awesome job making it clear who is speaking, too. Do thoughts qualify for dialogue? I haven't read the rules, but it's something I'd never considered before. What a great idea! *Bigsmile*

Punctuation/Grammar/Typos
         In the tenth line down, there is a typo I'm sure you'll want to correct:

But you've got you stick with your job.
Consider...
But you've got to stick with your job.

Suggestions/Thoughts
         I enjoyed this very much! Just one area, however, confused me a tad: before Lisa becomes the Book Bandit from over-exposure to her father as a writer! It's the first and last mention of Lisa, who I get is their daughter. I'm just not sure what this part means. I can be a little slow sometimes, *Laugh*.

         *Starb* My favorite
                             I liked how you could keep going back in time to get it right.
*Thumbsup* Nicely written! I hope my suggestions were helpful. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
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