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 In Loving Arms Surround Us - O LORD! Open in new Window. [E]
Poem written for the prompt - In Loving Arms!
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*Pumpkin2* Greetings, Jaiam Author Icon! I discovered "In Loving Arms Surround Us - O LORD!" Open in new Window., in Random Reviews and decided to review it. *Smile*

         First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. *Smile* Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

Flow
         Absolutely beautiful! I would say the only stumbling block for me would be each line began with an upper case letter. It's not really a bad thing, but it's something you might want to consider.

One example:

Let YOUR forgiveness, peace and healing
Flow freely to this weary world.

Instead...

Let YOUR forgiveness, peace and healing
flow freely to this weary world.

         Like I said, your way isn't wrong, but it does flow a little better without the cap at the beginning of the second line since the second line is an extention of the line above it. It's up to you though. *Smile*

Punctuation/Grammar
         I noticed no punctuation or grammar errors. *Wink*

         *Starb* My favorite lines:
                             For we built our hopes on shifting sands,
                             And had forgotten life has storms.
                             But now the rains have come again,

*Thumbsup* Nicely written! You are obviously very talented. *Smile*

Have a great day and...
*Pumpkin2*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Pumpkin2*
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