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Given: Oct 9, 2017 at 4:25pm
Length: 1,334 Characters |
1,181 w/o WritingML
Welcome to WDC Duke Raoul! I am happy back to check out another of your cool poems!
The title and theme are unique and appealing and again you do an effective job on mixing acrostic with nonet form. Fitting the concepts into the tight structure I imagine takes time and thought!
I love this and could visualize the student bored and causing mischeif. In fact paper airplane making is quite common in classrooms! LOL Good choice of theme, setting and action. I can imagine the drama. The mood of the student and response to the test page is potent and well shown!
Combining the idea of geometry with airplanes and trajectories is brilliant too. Your vocabulary is well chosen for the math theme. The last three lines are my favourite. The last word is dramatic and you leave us wondering if it hit the target or someone else. LOL
The forms were both intact and you used some repeated first letter sounds and alliteration that added to the flow and soundscape for reading aloud. The minimal use of punctuation was effective.
This was fun and ribbon-worthy! Thanks for sharing your gift!
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