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Hi the Wordy Jay Author Icon ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Ola Jay once again and happy 1st WDC Anniversary from myself and "Anniversary Reviews" Open in new Window.! *Bigsmile* I remember wanting to write something on this prompt but I couldn't think of anything so I just skipped this prompt and moved on to write on another one.

The starting of your work was excellent, it created a lot of suspense and curiosity in the reader's mind as you continued the story. The first time the phone rang and you attended the call and said it was a wrong number, I believed it and thought maybe, it was a prank call.

The second time when the phone rang and it was for the same person, some Ms. Kathleen Turnbull, I thought maybe the place where the phone was and the person who attended it, it was all haunted and you were actually a ghost, taking call in that house of yours to which you are bound for all your eternity due to some unfinished business *Laugh*.

The reader was completely hooked into your story and it was a surprise and a relief to see that it had a normal, happy and satisfying ending with the person named Ms. Kathleen Turnbull, your niece. An excellent and funny take on the right number, wrong person prompt. Well done, Jay!

The flow of your story was good, there was no interruption in it that distracted the reader from the original plot and text. The entire story was written in dialogues and nothing else but that seemed to have worked quite well for your story and the prompt. Excellent! Loved it.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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