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Hi the Wordy Jay Author Icon ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Ola Jay and happy 1st WDC Anniversary from myself and "Anniversary Reviews" Open in new Window.! *Bigsmile* I wanted to see the martell collection of stories and poetry you had. I know the pressure and the time limit under which you have to write the items so you did an amazing job having written so many stories and poems in just a month!

This one caught my attention. I have a sister and we fight all the time. She always uses my stuff but never lets me use hers. It's like I am the younger sister and she's the older *Laugh*. And people have actually mistaken her as elder sister and me as the younger because of her looks and because of her height. Your story was very cute, I loved how you started the story with the conversation with the girls of calling other stupid.

It set a very nice tone and setting for your story. I loved the little conversations you shared between Carla and Lisa, I loved the one in which you mentioned how the teacher had said Carla did excellent and asked Lisa what it meant and she said to work harder. That was hilarious and had me laughing so hard! *Laugh* Very, very cute and nice!

The flow of your story was good, there was no interruption of any sort for the reader. The pacing was good, it didn't seem rushed or slowed down. The dialogues you had written enhanced your work greatly, and engaged the reader directly.

There were no errors or typos of any sort that I could find in your work.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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