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 Review #4336519 |
 | Hand-Paddles  [ASR] short and humorous piece about how a young boy, considered a freak, could change so much.  |
| (4.5)| Hello there, Starr! I really enjoyed this little piece. As I read further into it, I was almost sure there had to be a moral at the end, and sure enough there was! Unfortunately, in this day age there is just too much bullying going on, and kids are prone to calling others 'freaks'. What's worse is that a lot of those kids who suffer from this end up taking their own lives, and that is NOT right! But that's where your great moral comes in, and hopefully more people will read this and realize that what might seem abnormal at first is actually normal in the long run! You did an excellent job of using that analogy of the hands being paddles, as well as having everyone's biggest interest being ping pong. Makes total sense! Very well done, Starr! It reminds me of some of those old Aesop's Fables from long ago. I did spot one tiny niggle: '...and allowed the boy to live(,) though they all were wary' Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! It was a pleasure to read, and I hope to see you back here soon!
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