Hi Jeffrey Meyer ,

This review is a part of "a very Wodehouse challenge"  [E].

Overall Impression:

This is a strong piece, dear author. One that in some ways it is not difficult to relate to, either. Moving to a new place is tough. You leave behind everything that you know. Everything that you had settled into throughout your time there. You have to leave behind your friends, and can only hope that you will make new ones - not an easy process.

But then, sometimes what was wasn't that great. That is certainly the situation here. Whilst the main character doesn't want to move, home contained some very bad memories, and some very big messes left behind by their father. In that sense, it'll be a fresh start. That gives them hope that maybe, in time, their new house and their new life will begin to feel like home.

You did a great job intertwining song lyrics with the piece. It's not easy to do that, but you managed it well.

And whilst it's a short piece, you provided a background to the main character's feelings, and enough detail to bring everything together and paint a clear picture of what is going on. The story ends on a hopeful note, and I like that. On the whole, I think that you have done an excellent job.

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions, dear author. Not very helpful, I know, but I didn't spot any errors, nor did I see anything that I felt you could improve upon. Again, great job!

My Rating:

A strong piece. I am glad that I got to read it.

I had no suggestions. Therefore, I will give this item the 5 out of 5 that it deserves.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .