Hi Dragon is hiding ,

This review is a part of "a very Wodehouse challenge"  [E].

Overall Impression:

This is a fascinating real account, Dragon. The description of your grandfather fleeing a war as well as religious persecution gives an insight into the horrors he must have faced. I can understand why he kept those experiences inside for so long and how, when they surfaced, they would have felt overwhelming.

It is a long and frightening journey that he, his father and the disciples faced. There were so many obstacles to overcome, so many dangers, and there was hunger and exhaustion. I like how your grandfather said that sometimes the rest was the best thing about stopping somewhere - I can completely understand that!

They all showed great courage and it is touching that they helped others where they could. In extreme situations one's true spirit shows, I think.

I also like the insights into Buddhism that this piece offers. That is very interesting as well. And your grandfather, his father and the disciples truly lived their faith.

Overall, I think that this is a very strong piece, and I enjoyed the read.

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion, Dragon, and that is to place line breaks between the paragraphs of the story. Doing so will make it easier on the eyes of the reader, and will no doubt be much appreciated!

My Rating:

As I mentioned above, this is a good read. Educational as well. I was glad that your family and the disciples arrived safely.

I only had one suggestion, and that had nothing to do with the actual content of the item. Therefore, I will give it a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you very much for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .