I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Review generator.

This was an interesting fantasy story that has room to grow into a fuller-length piece once the contest is over, if it is indeed a contest entry. I assume so, since I noticed the words in bold print.

There were images I could see and became more interested in knowing the characters better. But I was left with questions.


Observations:

"Whatever they hunt I must protect' she thought as she took to the air. She listened to the air and earth but was still surprised when she found their prey." You may want to replace the repeat of "air" with wind or breeze.

"There was [were] few mortals around but she found a traveling family."

I'm not sure if it was Elves that were causing all the evil pain, or humans, since you mention elves and a certain weapon that could harm but not kill. I guess that needs a bit of clarification.

Otherwise, a fine fantasy that has a lot of potential if developed a little more.

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