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Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC. *Books1*
This is a Simply Positive Review!


*Palette* I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Review generator.

*Cool* I think this is quite good if it is as stated in the brief description, indeed written by you when you were in the fifth grade.

*Saturn* I love it when grade school kids take an interest in writing and poetry. It is their first foray into the field with a simple rhyme pattern. However, this has a broader picture woven within. Using the universe as a backdrop to the poetry, brings so much imagery into play. I love the visual thrills of riding a meteor!

*PaintBrush* Kids do come up with some of the most creative things. Their muses are fresh and they aren't afraid to paint that picture with their words.

*FlipFlops4* Now, I don't know if you have done any modifications/editing of this poem since then. However, if it were being offered as an adult writing it, I would have suggested not repeating the word "could" in these consecutive lines.
"Flying faster than you could know,
You might feel like you could flow"

Otherwise, for a poem done in grade five, I say write on and imagine what you can do now! *CoffeeV*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*




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