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Wow, what a story! I just love those mysterious strangers that appear in time of great need and then, when the crisis has passed, the stranger is no where to be found.

Wonderful ending -- I will refrain from saying any more about the facts leading up to this appearance -- best to let the readers find out for themselves.

Observations:

"Tossing her cell phone on the bed, Sarah drop to her hands and knees to search under her bed, flinging back her comforter to better see what lies beneath." dropped

"Sarah heas as she slides into unconsciousness." [hears]?

There are spots that are a bit wordy and could have been tightened up. However, I understand the time pressures of "Writer's Cramp." You don't have too much time to get the prompt and start writing.

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