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 | End of Autumn  [13+] Flash Fiction for 5/29 keywords: basket, bridge, town  |
| (4.0)  I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Review generator. I enjoyed how your story began in a very calming fashion. You lead the reader to envision a gatherer of good things in nature to preserve and sell or trade, and to hold her over during the harshness of the winter months. I chuckled a little when I read the dog's name is "Pig." Of course, for years pigs were used to find truffles. The problem was -- they also enjoyed eating them!   The story had prompt words in bold that needed to be woven into the story, most likely for a contest, although I did not detect any word count at the end. However, the prompt words flowed naturally within the story. Good job, there.Observation:  I hesitate to believe this seasoned gatherer of items during harvest time, would mistake the item as not being poisonous. Truffles are not poisonous, however, Amanita and Corfinarius mushrooms start out as below ground growth (eggs) and may resemble a truffle, yet there texture is spongier and squishy, not like a true truffle. Thus, I think she would have known not to ingest it. Of course, I may be just too "picky" about this part.   Otherwise, good job! I loved the ending even though the above mentioned part made me cringe a little, it can't be as "cringy" as what happened to her at the end.  Until next time -- write on! regards, WebWitch   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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