Hi jaya

I'm glad I read this work of yours. It is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Heaven of freedom"  on behalf of "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" .

First Impression/Thoughts: This is a poem that has a very simple statement to make, and chooses a simple yet effective technique to do it.

Creativity/Impact: I like the central message of the poem, which is a criticism of certain unappealing aspects of society.

Message/Theme:
We are birds that are caged by irrationality and selfishness, and need God's help to set us all free.

Technique/Technical Notes:
These are just my thoughts and observations. I may not have read the work the way you intended. Please decide for yourself if these comments are helpful to you; if not, feel free to disregard them.

Title - The title is the first thing that prospective readers will see.

Grammar/Wording - I noticed nothing that jarred or confounded the reading. This is always a sign of good writing.

Form/Flow - The poem uses stanzas of four unrhymed lines each, that have a certain blend of order and freedom. The lines flow into each other to give a sense of continuity.

Emotion/Imagery - The central image is that of humans as caged birds yearning to be set free from our earthly prisons. There is probably nothing more suitable than using birds to symbolize freedom.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts: This is a neat poem that makes good use of a central conceit to convey its message.

Thank you for a wonderful read!


Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Azrael

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