Hi percy goodfellow

I'm glad I read this work of yours. It is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Tomorrow's Child"  on behalf of "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" .

First Impression/Thoughts:
This is a very meaningful poem that is well-crafted and resonant.

Creativity/Impact:
Using the metaphor of a child to symbolize our collective future is an excellent choice!

Message/Theme:
In a dark world descending even deeper into the shadows, how will the future unfold for our children?

Technique/Technical Notes:
These are just my thoughts and observations. I may not have read the work the way you intended. Please decide for yourself if these comments are helpful to you; if not, feel free to disregard them.

Title - The title is the first thing that prospective readers will see. I love how you use the word 'Tomorrow' together with 'child', seeing as how we always view children as the future. It fits the poem very well.

Grammar/Wording - I noticed nothing that jarred or confounded the reading. This is always a sign of good writing. You chose all your words carefully to fit the rhyme and meter, and to convey the nuance you intend. Excellent skill indeed!

Form/Flow - The poem starts off with something similar to epic verse with a rhyme scheme of abcb then becomes a series of questions. All stanzas are quartrains. I'm no expert on form, but I really like the change to questions towards the end.

Emotion/Imagery - The words are laden with nuance and imagery. My favorite line is Will fallen grace resume its place // and rescue right from wrong? for personal reasons, as I am writing something similar to that.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts: This is a thought-provoking and excellent poem. There's nothing I would change about it.

Thank you for a wonderful read!


Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Azrael

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .