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Hello there, bgsk
This is a Simply Positive Review! *Web4*


*PaintBrush* You paint a vivid portrait of a man who definitely has issues. Not only issues with drugs, but also with fidelity. He feels the power of his manhood coming alive from the high of the drugs, and has an insatiable need that is almost, if not totally, uncontrollable.

*Tackb* The reader could feel the emotional pull of the woman who had been his love, who knows he will never leave the power he gets from his drugs, behind to become her man, again. She gives him to the new plaything who really knows nothing of how the relationship will develop and the demands that will be made of her.

*Thought* I think some of the lines are a bit wordy. Here is an example:

"He plays a game that is always of sex and power.
He can go on and on and on for hour upon hour."

TRY:
Playing the game of sex and power
He can go on for hour upon hour

*Target* It's tighter and still hits the reader with the impact of his games. However, this is just one reader's opinion. *Wink*

*Hammer* Hard hitting poem about a tough situation.


Well done! *Hotair3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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