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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello there, Andy~hating university
This is a Simply Positive Review! *Turtle2*


*UmbrellaB* I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Review generator.

*Pencil* Indeed, it's the simple things in life that can bring us great pleasure. Hobbies we love, not only relax us, pushing out of mind those things that cause stress in an every day life, whether at work or dealing with indoor or outdoor chores.


Observation

"filled with lyrics so bright."
I think the word "so" needs to go. Plus it is slightly off rhythm with its rhyming line with the extra syllable. *Wink*

*Idea* TRY: Sounds of lyrics bright

*teagray* Otherwise, a fine poem that brings the reader into a world of those things that make you happy. I really enjoyed the vision of you cooking up a storm in the kitchen. I lIke the whole deferring the housework, part. However, I felt a slight twinge, more like a hefty cringe, at the thought of preparing for GoT! *Crazy*

*Bell* The overall poem had a good rhyme, and the rhythm smooth for the most part. There was also some fine imagery to go along with it for the reader to picture.


Well done! *BadgeFire*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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