I am a big fan of comedy, thus I found your item while searching for a bit of humor to read.

This was funny. I could picture the youngster trying to correct his mother on her bus-ride math. Hey, it sounded quite reasonable to me! However, everyone knows that WebWitch doesn't do math.

Observations

"Around that (time) I was trying to get my head around fractions."

"After much thought I concluded that “Sections” must (be) some sort of mathematical term for something I did not understand"

"maths" "math" when abbreviated (no "s" at the end) OR write out the word mathematics.

Further Observations:

I think the introduction could be separated as an author's note, or eliminated completely. It adds unnecessary words to an item that is obviously for a contest with a tight word count. You could start the story saying: "This story involves an incident that happened to me when I was about eight or nine years old ..."


Result:

You have rid yourself of all the explanations about writing and deleting stories to make room, and forgetting which site you entered the story into. This really has nothing to do with the story itself, thus is added filler. Writing tighter, especially for word count entries, leaves room for a few more lines of humor to be added that directly pertain to math issues.

This was a fun read. I love knowing that I am not the only one who finds that math should be left to experts -- such as bus drivers!

You responded to this review 04/11/2017 @ 12:08am EDT

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