Hi Liam

I'm glad I read this work of yours. It is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "I've Got a Secret"  on behalf of "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" .

First Impression/Thoughts:
Great meter and rhyme maintained throughout that imparts a lyrical rhythm to a meaningful poem.

Creativity/Impact:
I like how you reveal lots of little known facts, and then suggest that there's still one big secret you're keeping at the end.

Message/Theme:
Very nice commentary on the lot of Man in the world.

Technique/Technical Notes:
These are just my thoughts and observations. I may not have read the work the way you intended. Please decide for yourself if these comments are helpful to you; if not, feel free to disregard them.

Title - The title is the first thing that prospective readers will see. The title actually suggests a more personal type of poem that what we actually read, but is very apt for the content. Many people are still deluded about or ignorant of how society is structured a certain way to advantage some and disadvantage others.

Grammar/Wording - I noticed nothing that jarred or confounded the reading. This is always a sign of good writing.

Form/Flow - I'm no expert on meter and form, but to my unlearnt ear and eye everything looks and sounds perfect.

Emotion/Imagery - My favorite line has to be 'they're taught to love this labor'. So sad but so true.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
There's nothing I would change about this poem. It's a great piece of work. Thank you for a wonderful read!


Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Azrael

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .